Thanks for the compliment dude. I wrote a bit more of the other two songs too. I'll post them when I can.
EDIT: And now I can. w00t! They're still unfinished, but I've definitely made progress, especially with "Your Loyal Fool", which I think is my new favorite of three. Here it comes, people!
"YOUR LOYAL FOOL"{v1} Long destructive path
Wide winding road
Heading down this trail of dread,
Bound down to this truckbed,
Raindrops soaking my forehead
{bridge 1} No matter how hard I try to
Rattle these chains
The cagebars never bend
I CAN'T SEE CHANGE
{v2} Everything I long for
Just beyond my reach
I watch as it all pulls away,
Far away from me
My disease,
From the beginning,
Has cursed me {side note: in this song, cursed goes "KUR-SED" instead of how you'd normally say it)
{bridge 2} Even when I encounter
The One who breaks these chains,
'Tis not long 'til I'm tempted back to those same pains
HOW CAN I CHANGE?
{instrumental where song transistions to more of a traditional metal style}
{chorus} THESE ARE MY SLAVE CHAINS
[singing] That keep me bound
THE LIFE'S CONTROL, WE NEVER GAINED
[singing] You drag me on the ground
I AM NONE ABOVE YOUR...LOYAL FOOL
[singing] Your worthless tool
SO GOES THE WAYS,
OF MY SLAVE CHAINS, GO
{verse 3} The lies, the torture, the pain
'Twas me you slain
You always seem to treat this like
It's some sort of game
The reactions, the terrible blame,
The hideous words I heard you say
The last phrase into my ear,
Should my downfall be near,
And I'm still heading off towards the gloom
(Taking off for my doom)
HEADING OFF TOWARDS THE GLOOM
(TAKING OFF FOR MY DOOM YOU FORCED ON ME)
{chorus}
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"AMAZING CURSE"{verse 1} Many centuries in the past,
An angel had fallen from heaven fast
She had awoken on the ground, longing to return
Struggled hard through earthly pains
Until a good man found her
And took her under his wing
{bridge 1} He said:
"Don't worry; everything will be alright.
I will acquaint you with this world,
And follow your light.
I will protect you every single day
Until the time comes when we go our separate ways."
{v2} There she found refuge
For a time
Until she was left there,
Fighting for her life
It seemed things were back to their old ways
Until a brave knight raced in, swept her off her feet,
And rode off into the stormy haze!
{instrumental, song transitions from soft rock to energetic, slightly Dragonforce style}
{v3} That knight and the angel
They never have parted
Through mountains and valleys,
An endless journey had started
To see all the heavenly sights they could see
And maybe one day the man will bend his knee
{chorus} It's an amazing curse
Stuck with the one's undeserved
The wretched people, with the sweet, sweet angel
It's an amazing curse
Fallen down on the earth
Living on her own, and moving on
{v4} As they rode through
The wide open plains
-------Aaaaand that's all I have for verse 4 and the rest of the song right now.
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